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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 27, 2005 22:44:23 GMT -5
Well,i know a girl called Mariam not Marian
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 27, 2005 23:09:11 GMT -5
;D You phail...
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Post by Demoneyes on Aug 28, 2005 7:30:44 GMT -5
Great story, keep it up.
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 28, 2005 13:25:00 GMT -5
Chapter 6: Davin's Past
The Next Day...
Caleb was hurriedly walking to Davin's shop. He'd been up most of the previous night stitching a new outfit for himself, because his mother had thrown away his leathers. His new clothing consisted of a light blue gi, dark blue overshirt, dark blue strap belt, and dark blue boots and gloves. All of it was covered with a shiny blue scale covering. When Caleb wore it, he truly looked like an adventurer.
But he wasn't wearing it now, it had become too precious to him. He was wearing a simple outfit of black pants and a white t-shirt with black armbands. He was trying to look tough today, trying to gain back his respect he once had from the citizens of Tiro.
Caleb wasn't exactly getting pretty faces, but people were watching him when he walked. A few young girls smiled at him, and he smiled back. He went over to talk to them for a while. Around 10:00 PM he said goodbye and headed for Davin's Shop.
Upon arriving, Davin gave Caleb his new alluminum alloid armor, helmet, breastplate, armplates, and leg armor. "Thanks, this is even better quality than the armor I had before. What'd you make it with?" Davin smiled and crossed his arms across his big, broad chest. "I got one of my messenger boys to go down to Ardum Valley and bring back an alluminum alloid rock. The substance inside those things are nearly invulnerable."
"Well, thanks alot old timer. So, are you going to the parade in Ardum Kingdom today? Everybody's gonna be there...the king, the queen...princess...uhh...Marian..." Caleb slowly turned away and scratched his head, his cheeks turning bright red.
Davin seemed to notice this and was interested. "Princess Marian huh? How long has it been since you've seen here? Three or four years?" "You think she'll remember me?" Davin rubbed his hairy beard and thought for a moment. "Ya know, I never told you about my first love, did?" Caleb shook his head.
"Well," Davin continued, "her name was Shila. She was fifteen, I was eighteen. I was a nobody, and she was the most precious thing in all of Vallu Village. She was the princess actually..." It was at this moment that Caleb realized this sounded exactly like his own life.
Davin began to daydream as he looked through the window behind Caleb, staring off into the clouds. "Well...?" "Well what?" "What happened with you and her?" "Oh, right. Well...she never really knew me, but I loved her dearly, and had deep feelings for her...one day, during a festival in Vallu Village, a group of young men my age challenged me to a fight, picking on me. I knew I didn't stand a chance against any of them, so I began to walk away.
They stopped me and began to attack me. I was punched and kicked while everyone looked on, laughing at me. Princess Shila saw, and ran over to stop them. One of the men, Darian, the leader, slapped her, knocking her to the ground, and that was it. That was enough to make me want to fight. My blood was boiling. I jumped up and punched Darian as hard as he could, sending him flying backwards onto the ground.
Enraged, Darian got back to his feet and drew his sword. He began walking toward me, about to strike, when Princess Shila ran up to him and jumped on his back. Darian was pulled back onto the ground, on top of Princess Shila, and his sword pierced her heart. Darian got to his feet and looked on in horror as blood gushed up from the Princess's chest.
As she lie there, bleeding, I could've sworn she looked right at me." Caleb was astonished. "Davin...wow, I'm...I'm so sorry." "It's all right kid. It was a long time ago. I got over it..." Caleb was still curious. "So...what happened to Darian?" "Oh him, he ran away before the guards could come and stop him. I sat down beside her body, trying to stop the bleeding. When the guards arrived, I was blamed for her death. I was sentenced to death.
On the night of my execution...just as the stool was about to be kicked from beneath my feet and my neck be strangled, an arrow wizzed above my head. Two of them. The first one struck the guard standing beside me in the chest, the second one cut my rope, and I dropped to the ground. A white horse came out of nowhere and I jumped onto it's back..." Just then, something semed to light up inside Caleb's head. "Windy? My horse? You gave her to me for my fourteenth birthday...I would've never known.
So, who was it that shot the arrows?" Davin's face went blank. "I...I never found out. I just ran away, far, far away, all the way to Tiro, here, and I started making a living. I became a blacksmith. I never got married though...my love for Shila was too great...and I still have dreams sometimes." "Wow, that's deep," Caleb said, putting a hand on Davin's shoulder.
"I'm so sorry Davin, I wish there was something I could..." "You can," Davin interrupted. "You can change the way this world has become. On your adventures to come, travel to the darkest villages and towns you find, and make things right in them. Stop the thiefs, the killers...I know you can do it Caleb...you're a great warrior...you are Thoro..."
Caleb smiled, a tear dropping down his cheek. "Don't worry Davin, I'll do my best...I'm going to stop all the evil in this world for good. I'll help everyone, the men, the women, the children, even the animals and insects. I can make all of this right again...thanks Davin, thank you so much for this."
As Caleb turned around and walked out of the shop, Davin watched him go, smiling. There's something special about that boy...I know he can purify these sacred lands of our brothers...I believe in you, Caleb...
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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 28, 2005 20:09:20 GMT -5
*wakes up* sweet...
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 28, 2005 21:43:15 GMT -5
From now on, please give me your honest opinions. If you pretend to encourage me, I will go on making the mistakes that make the story seemingly uninteresting and boring to you, but if help me see the boring parts and let me know how to make it better, I'll make it kickass.
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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 28, 2005 21:52:34 GMT -5
well,nothing bad up until now,just write a lil longer. And try to mix a lil more action into it.And if ure thinkin of using dbz fighting style,4get about it.U need to try smth new.
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 28, 2005 21:57:32 GMT -5
No, dbz isn't what I'm going for...think of uhh...Golden Sun and Final Fantasy. ;D
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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 28, 2005 22:01:40 GMT -5
well,since i dun know the storyline of either one of those,i dun know what to say...
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 28, 2005 22:06:31 GMT -5
You don't play Final Fantasy!?!?! OMFG YOU SUCK!!!!!!!! ;D ;D I don't play either. ^_^
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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 28, 2005 22:11:27 GMT -5
THEN HOW THE HELL DO I SUCK?!?!?!?!!!!1!1!one
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 28, 2005 22:13:28 GMT -5
I dunno all the FF games got good scores and reviews and everyone seems to like them so...I dunno, you uhh... suck.
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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 28, 2005 22:15:50 GMT -5
lol,crazy old man
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Post by Vegitenks on Aug 28, 2005 22:18:37 GMT -5
Crazy old man? ;D You forget we're the same age you idiot...
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Post by Mangekyou on Aug 28, 2005 22:20:59 GMT -5
actually ure 6 months older,and more perverted than me,so,yeah,crazy old man,lolz
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